For the next few months, weekly writing tips will include word choice suggestions. That includes:
- colorful and original descriptions
- pithy words and phrases
- picture nouns and action verbs
- writing that draws a reader in and addicts them to your voice
I keep a collection of descriptions that have pulled me into the books. I’m fascinated how authors can–in just a few words–put me in the middle of their story and make me want to stay there. This one’s on how to describe rooms.
A note: These are for inspiration only. They can’t be copied because they’ve been pulled directly from an author’s copyrighted manuscript (intellectual property is immediately copyrighted when published).
- Viking, Miele, KitchenAid, Sub-Zero, separate freezer, wine cooler, radiant bulb cookers. Stainless steel and oak. Pots and implements sat in glass-doored cabinets along one entire wall.
- Oversized reading chair
- A lazy Susan in the middle of the table
- Between them was a pot of something steaming and one upside-down mug and an ashtray with a cigarette burning in it.
- Past the lobby, a central dining area held a dozen tables, all filled with patrons. A din of laughter and chatter, in Mandarin, inhabited the space as waiters moved quickly between tables.
- I could settle into a deep overstuffed couch, order a beer from a tuxedoed waiter and listen to the harp.
- On top of the table were two tea cups, both filled, tiny clouds of steam rising up from the tea. Two plates, on top of one was a hard-boiled egg, cracked open, and a piece of rye toast, a bite missing.
- Cabral’s threadbare apartment where like his bandmate Hernandez, he lived alone and sparely. There was no sign of a wife or children. No framed photos, no school drawings on the refrigerator.
- Entering this room always felt like entering a time warp.
- The walls were lined floor-to-ceiling in bookshelves, every inch filled, and in the corner of the room as a simple desk, neat and orderly, a few piles of paper stacked in the middle, and a small light on. In the center of the room, two red sofas faced each other across a large, round glass coffee table.
- Dickensian warren piled high with yellowed catalogs
Jacqui Murray is the author of the popular Building a Midshipman, the story of her daughter’s journey from high school to United States Naval Academy. She is the author/editor of over a hundred books on integrating tech into education, adjunct professor of technology in education, webmaster for four blogs, an Amazon Vine Voice book reviewer, a columnist for TeachHUB, Editorial Review Board member for Journal for Computing Teachers, monthly contributor to Today’s Author and a freelance journalist on tech ed topics. You can find her book at her publisher’s website, Structured Learning.