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45 Transitions That Help Your Story Flow

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For the next few months, weekly writing tips will include word choice suggestions. That includes:

  • colorful and original descriptions
  • pithy words and phrases
  • picture nouns and action verbs
  • writing that draws a reader in and addicts them to your voice

I keep a  collection of descriptions that have pulled me into the books. I’m fascinated how authors can–in just a few words–put me in the middle of their story and make me want to stay there. This one’s on transitions that help your story flow.

A note: These are for inspiration only. They can’t be copied because they’ve been pulled directly from an author’s copyrighted manuscript (intellectual property is immediately copyrighted when published).

Another note: These resonate with me. They may make no sense to your muse. That’s fine–just skip those!


  1. By the middle of September, he had changed his name three times and was in a new place every night. Today was Room 338.
  2. Ten minutes later, top down on the Corvette, Hootie blaring from his car’s speakers, he cleared Candlestick Point and twenty minutes after that was parking in the courthouse lot 25-miles south.
  3. Have I done something wrong?
  4. Ten minutes later, Bosch was standing with the remote control in front of the AV equipment…
  5. Well, I believe that about covers the situation.
  6. Ten hours later I was in the coach section.
  7. I was sitting in the front seat of a patrol car talking to a cop named Cataldo. We were cruising along.
  8. I spun my wheels for a couple of days until I finally met with …
  9. Finding Jonathan Parson’s former wife ate up another ninety minutes of his time.
  10. The song was running through his mind twenty-one years later when the bomb went off.
  11. “Good, I’m good!” he shouted. We all looked over to see what he could possibly mean.
  12. It was dark when I got there, and my head was so clear as to be empty. I check in, unpacked, went to the bar and had a sandwich and a couple of beers, went back up to my room and, exhausted from the excitement, went to bed.
  13. Long gone, despite what Hollywood would have you believe.
  14. If that’s all you know about Jack Murtha … you don’t know Jack.
  15. He stopped completely, standing, apparently distracted, outside the hotel, looking at his watch, checking the passersby, watching for someone who hesitated, someone who might slow down and stop.
  16. If she left now, she’d still make it to St. Camillus to light that candle.
  17. Frank sat on the tailgate of his glossy new Ford pickup, watching the men in the trench work.
  18. After some light-hearted banter about the craziness of the music business and the foibles of the various artists, dinner arrived.
  19. Steered the conversation toward innocuous subjects.
  20. Rainie was missing. How could he be sitting in a luxury sedan?
  21. At the best of times, I’m a slow reader, this wasn’t one of those times.
  22. After hanging up the phone, I ate a solitary late-night snack, did some reading, climbed into bed and eventually got some sleep.
  23. Led him through greening hills and valleys, but he was only dimly aware of the scenery.
  24. The subtext is…
  25. He stirred powdered milk into the dark liquid until it turned the color of caramel.
  26. They’d covered some of this territory before.
  27. She sat for a moment, organizing her thoughts on how to proceed.
  28. Stromsoe was in high school when he met the boy who would someday murder his wife and son.
  29. I waited. The rain came down hard on the roof of the car. A station wagon with fake wood sides pulled in beside us and a man and woman and three children piled out and scooted through the rain. I could hear the running lines of a power boat as it edged along toward where Hog Island would have been had the day been sunny and clear. I waited. Me and Carl.
  30. I was going to be late for Susan if I didn’t close this off.
  31. I was just sitting here wondering what I could do to be nice to you, and now you call.
  32. If you ever find yourself in the part of the world where France and Germany meet and want your heart broken, drive up…. (describe the scenery).
  33. Carrying a tray with coffee and cups and cookies, she set it down on the table in front of Abe.
  34. Kind of guy you wanted out of the gene pool.
  35. While I waited, I read the vulgar graffiti on the phone box.
  36. What’s any of this got to do with…
  37. Just couldn’t get the image of her odd blue eyes out of his head, and he had been dazzled by the firelight shooting burnished copper glints through her luxurious hair.
  38. Reminded him of his age, his descending career path and his developing sense of isolation.
  39. I walked all the way around the truck and pondered Weebe’s hypothesis. If I had…
  40. On both sides of the map were framed photographs (use them to provide background).
  41. Standing under the hot water, trying to punch holes in his plan.
  42. Diane was in early the next morning. After a workout at home, she jogged the museum nature trail and took a shower in her office suite. She felt invigorated. Her arm was healing nicely. She did some museum business and had put all the finished papers on Andie’s  by the time her assistant arrived. They spent a few minutes discussing museum business, then Diane went upstairs to the crime lab.
  43. More surprising than the crash was that she was dying in English.
  44. She’d be landing in about an hour. She’d stop at Heney’s, get Pearl, and go home. She’d feed Pearl, unpack and hang everything up carefully, iron things that had wrinkled, take a bath, put on the pajamas she usually wore when she slept without me, get in bed with Pearl, have a half cup of frozen chocolate yogurt sweetened with aspartame, and watch a movie. Pearl would burrow under the covers and then Susan would fall asleep.
  45. I ate in the silence and drank my coffee and looked occasionally at Susan’s picture on my desk.

Click for the complete list of 69 writer’s themed descriptions.

More collections:

17 Ways to Describe Offices

34 Ways to Describe Scents

28 Ways to Describe Geeks

Jacqui Murray is the author of the popular Building a Midshipman, the story of her daughter’s journey from high school to United States Naval Academy, and To Hunt a Sub (her debut fiction). She is the author/editor of over a hundred books on integrating tech into education, adjunct professor of technology in education, webmaster for four blogs, an Amazon Vine Voice book reviewer,  a columnist for TeachHUB, Editorial Review Board member for Journal for Computing Teachers, monthly contributor to Today’s Author and a freelance journalist on tech ed topics. You can find her book at her publisher’s website, Structured Learning. 


57 thoughts on “45 Transitions That Help Your Story Flow

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  4. I love the topic here and the examples you have provided… I am particularly fond of the ones involving temporary jumps and flashbacks. In this sense, I especially liked: “The song was running through his mind twenty-one years later when the bomb went off” & “I spun my wheels for a couple of days until I finally met with “-” …. Brilliant!.. sending all my best wishes, dear Jacqui. Happy weekend. Aquileana 😉

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  5. I’d never heard the term of transition in stories until my son mentioned them following his English lesson. They seem to concentrate on just a couple of words but your great selection here makes a lot more sense. Some a mini story in themselves but work well between the scenes. Thanks for hints…gets me thinking, Jacqui.

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  6. I found about seven of these to be exceptional, but my absolute favorite is this one:The song was running through his mind twenty-one years later when the bomb went off.
    That is a transition to remember!

    You’ve compiled an interesting collection, Jacqui.

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  7. Excellent, Jacqui. These are great for showing time passing as well as skipping over unnecessary dialog even though you want to give the impression of conversation. They can also, on occasion, eliminate time-related scene breaks. Very handy!

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  8. Thank you for this – your tips make me think “Right! – You can do this!” when I have been thining ”You can’t do this!’ – usually by Thursday afternoon.

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